Critiquing Amanda Partlow

Poem 1

The metaphor of the girl being the sun and the boy being the ocean is BEAUTIFUL.  The descriptions are phenomenal.  The last four lines bring the descriptions together very well.  I love the last line the most.  Excellent word choice! I wouldn't change anything about this poem.

Poem 2

I'd like to know more about this little girl.  Is she the poet's little sister?  The not-so-explicit way of telling this tale of siblings adds an element of mystery to this poem. I really like it. I like the Ozzy reference ("My music bit the heads off bats.")  Nice personification!  There really isn't anything I would change about this poem either, except maybe putting a title.